100 WORD CHALLENGE
“Greetings humans of the
earth my name is peaky the ohbot. I was sent here by aliens, from a planet
called uranus. Im here to tell you that the aliens are going to come to
earth and they mean peace. They are coming to take there ship back that crashed
about 3 years ago, and they have been searching for over the past 3 years. The
aliens are going to come in 2 days so be prepared. You will know when there
because you will bright lights in the air. That is all have to say to you
people on earth.
Great story just a few minor things I would suggest ...
ReplyDelete1. you need an indent when you start your story
2. you should say i was sen t here by aliens instead of from aliens
3. aliens is spelt this way
4. u should be you remember no slang
5. they should have a capitol as it is the begining of the sentence #4
thx for hearing out my suggestions
nice story, but you used "u" instead of "you". also aliens is spelled wrong it should be aliens instead of aliens. indent the story, and you should use more complex words for example: instead of searching you can put piercing
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